Thursday, November 12, 2015

Storytelling Week 12: Brotherly Love


Sir Bors is a man that has lived his life completely pure and is on his way to recieve the holy graal. Bors runs into a man on the way though that is even more upright with righteousness than himself. The good man tells Sir Bors that in order for him to receive the holy graal he must confess his sins. Sir Bors does this and allows the good man to cloak him with some linen to remind him to stay pure. Sir Bors gets back on track and heads fir the holy graal. 

As Sir Bors travels, he runs in to his brother John by chance in a town square. Bors asks why John is not at home watching over the family. John tells Bors that he left to come help him on his journey to the holy graal. Bros breaks out in anger. He yells at him calling him a fool leaving the family with no protection when the enemy army katars lurks through the land without any warning. John tries to explain himself, but their voiced exchanges become even more heated. Bors commands John goes back home now. John refuses the command. 

John and Bors look at each other and run with all their might towards the other. They both throw their bodies in the air and collide. They fall to the ground and start hitting back and forth. Bors breaks John's nose. John gives Bors a black eye. Suddenly, an arrow lands at their feet in the ground. They both look up to see they are surrounded by hooded warriors. John and Sir Bors take refuge behind their shields. Once the warriors were out of arrows, the brothers looked at each other with a smile thinking the same thing, "our turn." The brothers charge and fight for their lives. Back to back they fight with enemies closing in on all sides. John rolls over Bors back to protect his weak side. Bors yells for John to duck as he throws a dagger at an oncoming attacker. There are three men left and both brothers throw their swords at two killing them. Sir Bors grabs his bow and with careful aim waits patiently for his shot to clear of the fleeing attacker. Its clear and he releases a perfect shot. The brother look on the cloak on one warrior to see why they attacked. They had papers that are Latin, but read "Graal Elite." The brothers continue on their journey. 

Author's Note: I chose third person narration as the storytelling style because it gives this parable a more epic feel. My main goal for this story was to change the way Sir Bors and his brother get out of fighting one another while keeping Sir Bors pure. 

In the original story, The Adventure if Sir Bors, Sir Bors (pure  in heart man) meets a good man that has him confess his sins so he can receive the holy graal. Sir Bors in his travels has his purity tested while getting into a fight with his brother. When Sir Bors was about to kill his brother without good reason, both brother's shields burn  falling to the ground. Both become unconscious and wake up with no memory of the event. Sir Bors then continues on his travels. 

The main difference my story had was just bringing the brothers together in my story through protecting one another (God's Plan). 

Bibliography:The Adventure if Sir Bors, King Arthur: The Tales of the Round Table, Andrew Lang (1902)

2 comments:

  1. Hi Ben!

    What a fantastic story! I read the King Arthur unit as well and thought it was so interesting. I love the way that you rewrote this story. It definitely gives it the epic feel that you were going for. To be honest, I don't remember reading this story even though I read the entire unit! Regardless, I will definitely remember it now!

    You had a couple of spelling errors in the story, but nothing major. Just give it a quick read and I'm sure you'll catch them.

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  2. A very interesting story, Ben! I liked how you kept the main character and the connection he made with his brother. I also liked the moral of the story and how you kept it connected to “God’s Plan.” Even though the brothers did not get along when danger presented itself they were able to work through it together. The only mistake I found was that in the story link you put “if” instead of “of” in the title, "The Adventures of Sir Bros."

    Nice work!

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