John was baptizing people one day and all of a sudden the man he heard about starts walking towards him. He said, "Jesus is that you?" Jesus replied, "Yes, I seek to be baptized." John feeling unworthy steps back. Jesus says all are worthy in my eyes. So, John baptized Jesus. Out of nowhere, the Romans started rushing at them. John and Jesus were surrounded and Jesus looked at John fearing for his life. Jesus looked at him and everything slowed down, "John do not be afraid I am with you." The Romans were within striking distance when Jesus snapped His fingers and all were paralyzed standing up. Jesus said, "Why do you persecute me? Don't you know I am here to help you?" The Romans in disarray are released by Jesus and flee from His site.
After a little while, Jesus gathered disciples so He could teach them his ways. Judas and Peter were two of his disciples that struggled the most with His teachings. The teaching Jesus loved was to put others before yourself. The reasoning He has was that the first shall be last and the last shall be first. Peter and Judas didn't like this because they were concerned with their needs more.
So, finally the night had come that Jesus foretold for many days. Jesus was to be taken by the Romans and betrayed by one of his disciples. As they sat at their last dinner together Peter and Judas said, "Surely it is not I Lord?" The time passed and Peter nor Judas were seen. The Romans showed up to take Jesus away for his blaspheme. "You are not the son of God and have no authority to claim so," they said. Slowly the Romans walked toward Jesus step by step. Everyone is staring at Jesus wondering what He will do. All you can hear is heavy breathing. One Roman guard took his last step to Jesus and said, "Get up." Jesus looked up at him. Boom! The cloth they were all eating on collapsed thanks to Peter and Judas. They both yelled, "Run!" Everyone got out and headed for the hills. Finally safe, went into the woods by himself.
Jesus was praying to God saying, "Father what am I to do? The prophecy did not come true." God replied, "Son live and keep living. A new time of my creation has come. Your prophecy has changed and I need you to search for men who can spread your word." Jesus did so and lived until he died from old age. People did not like that He proclaimed He was the son of God. He was tortured, but his legacy lives on. Christianity spread all over the world and Jesus learned that sometimes you get a second chance; no matter how short the time is.
Author's note: -John The Baptist and Jesus
-I chose fiction (considering I believe what happened to Jesus was real) and portions of the actual story were changed. I chose fiction because it allowed me to change this story in a subtle yet huge way. My main goal to the story was to give Jesus a little more power that still stayed true to his character and to change Peter/Judas's outcomes. Jesus really got baptized by John the Baptist, but did not get attacked by Romans. I chose the paralyzing Roman power so that Jesus did not harm anyone and still was accountable to his teachings. Also, Judas actually betrays Jesus and Peter denies he knows Jesus three times in the original story. I changed this because I wanted to create a very subtle difference that showed just how easy the other way this story could have gone. Imagine if they all fought and made it free like they did in this story? What would they have done? Imagine the adventures.
Bibliography: John The Baptist and Jesus, King James Bible (1611) Mark 1
The Miracles of Jesus, King James Bible (1611) Mark 6
The Teachings of Jesus, King James Bible (1611) Mark 9
The Last Supper, King James Bible (1611) Mark 14
The way you approached this gospel is really interesting. As a Christian, my whole being sort of rebels against the changes you made, but I think you made them in such a way the essence of who Jesus was remains the same. Because Jesus and his story is so real to me, I have a hard time imagining him running from the fate that God set out for him. It is really interesting to think about how different things would have been if he had not been crucified—that idea definitely raises some very provocative questions about how Christianity would have spread and endured.
ReplyDeleteVery creative!!
Hey Ben,
ReplyDeleteI thought that your story about Jesus escaping his prophecy was very interesting. What I like about stories in general is that you can change a few little details and you're left with a completely new story. I like the picture you choose for the beginning of your post. Jesus clothed in black gives a powerful mental image, especially when it's combined with your title. It would be cool if you did a follow up story about some of the adventures that Jesus and his disciples got up to after he escaped the Romans!
In the future, I would suggest that you separate the dialogue from the main body of text. It allows readers to focus on the characters of the story and breaks up big chunks of text. I would also pay close attention that you stay in the same tense (present or past). When you switch between the two, it disrupts the flow of the story.
Overall, I enjoyed your story and I look forward to reading more from you in the future!
Oh wow. The changes you made to this are very interesting. I like how you took a few details and changed them to make the ending completely different. I also like how you took Peter and Judas and used them to save Jesus instead of going with the original storyline. This was very creative in a very subtle way! Great job!
ReplyDeleteHey Ben, I really liked that you took the approach to change a few details in this story and I loved that the ending changed so drastically because of those few small details. I also really liked the message at the end of your story, especially the final sentence! I thought the last sentence was very powerful!
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