In Flint Visits the Rabbit I thought it was okay, but I was pretty confused when I was reading the story. The ending particularly was confusing. The Rabbit stabs Flint with his make shift knife. Next, the Rabbit runs back into his hole and he hears an explosion. Suddenly, Flint is flying everywhere. I probably misread it, but I see no point where it makes sense for an explosion to occur at this time. So, the story for me needs a better clearer conclusion. Otherwise, it is not effective.
In Why the Possum's Tail is Bare there is some heated action. I feel it is too short and does not have the best storyline. The story is only about the antagonist getting the protagonist. The rabbit makes the possum's tail bare and embarrasses him at a dance. The story ends right then when the possum rolls over and doesn't move. I think we need a longer plot that shows what the possum does after that situation.
Secondly, it doesn't feel like a happy ending. Give the audience what everyone wants: a happy ending. Although this type of thing could happen in real, the story seems evil without a happy ending. It seems like a cynical way to view life. I wonder if who wrote this was jealous at one point.
Also, the paragraphs could have been broken up to make the story easier to read. It would also move the story along even faster. I know it is a true story, but I think this suggestion should hold true in any form of writing. White space is not a bad thing.
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